Blue Fairy

(Rose) Rose and Colt had just landed beside the boy. He looked nervous and was glancing from Colt to Rose, waiting for them to say something. Rose eyed him up ...

A sleeping princess :D Blue Fairy

Rose had been wary of the older boy at first but once she knew he was helping her, she let herself be dragged along behind. She glanced up at his ...

Oooo i love those bright, blue eyes and the hair has caught the light really well. The dress is a nice colour and is very fitted. I love those shoes ...

(Rose) Rose slumped in her tiny cage, her hands still gripping the bars. She hadn't escaped in time. The stranger had not seen her cage. Everyone else was probably gone ...

I read the rest, and I liked it. The figt scenes wer vbery well structured, I thought this was a vrey successful piece! - Aed what's going on with this ...

hi this chapter is very interesting but a bit confusing. which jutted out like a violin from a small green hill. I don't understand this sentence. what do you mean ...

this looks like fun Name: Rose Age:13 Characteristics: Small, Long brown hair, bright green eyes, snow white wings streaked with gold Personality:Blurts out what ever is on her mind which ...

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I have also put the last little bit of Chapter 1 that I didn't post before :D hope you enjoy it It was eight o’ clock. Tally sat in her ...

thank you. you've helped loads. If any has anything else I could improve on let me know :D ~Fairy

I really loved reading this. you describe everything excellently and you bring the animals to life. I'll answer your questions first :D 1. I think the second person does work ...

this is a random chapter of a novel I just finished. I've posted to make sure I haven't gone completely wrong :? enjoy :D The sky crackled above the hills, ...

I thought it was great. you can describe things really well to build up a clear image in the reader's mind. :) I couldn't find anything you could improve. good ...

arrgghhh! this is really hard to read because it's a towering solid chunk of text :? Seperate it into paragraphs and you will get more reviews. I'll crit it for ...